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Section 6.2.3

Unnecessary Repetition

Avoid unnecessary repetition. One of the most common types of unnecessary repetition involves modifiers that repeat information given in the word modified.


small in size

completely eliminate

silver in color

maximize as much as possible

Unacceptable

Currently, aircraft must be kept a minimum of at least three miles apart in the horizontal plane.

Improved

Currently, aircraft must be kept a minimum of three miles apart in the horizontal plane.

--Jason C. Bunn, "Advanced Air Traffic Situation Control System" (modified)

Weak

In 1928, Alexander Fleming discovered for the first time that Penicillum mold could kill Staphylococcus bacteria in petri dishes. Fleming named the lethal antibacterial chemical secreted by the deadly Penicillum mold, dubbing it "penicillin."

Improved

In 1928, Alexander Fleming discovered that Penicillum mold could kill Staphylococcus bacteria in petri dishes. He dubbed the lethal antibacterial chemical secreted by the mold "penicillin."

--Laurie Garrett, The Coming Plague (modified)

Weak

Ability to separate from water is an essential prerequisite for a hydraulic oil to be used in plant systems where contamination of the hydraulic system by water is likely to form sludge emulsions of oil and water. [There is much repetition of phrases and terms in this sentence.]

Improved

Plants with hydraulic systems routinely exposed to water should use hydraulic oils that are immiscible with water.


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